Unexpected Ways

2 Feb
new beginnings come
in most unexpected ways
while storms rage outside

One Response to “Unexpected Ways”

  1. Andrea Grillo February 2, 2011 at 5:23 PM #

    Great one! Check out the FB page: NaHaiWriMo – everyone is posting there too. A quick critique – try leaving out the words “come” and “while” – they are unecessary and without them the haiku rises poetically. You can still read it as a total poem – three lines or first and second line as well as second and third line. Excellent. Hint: omit verbs when you can. Now for #2 – keep it simple.

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